Hello, class!
Now that we’ve completed Activity 4, I would
like to give you some general feedback. Below you will find general feedback on
the first task of Activity 4 (the written task in the forum). Remember that
soon you will receive individual feedback for Task 2 (the Tandem conversation).
GOOD EXPRESSIONS
Here are some excellent expressions you used when
applying for jobs. I suggest you have a look at all the examples, because I’m
sure you’ll find something new! (Some of these sentences contained very small
mistakes, which I corrected in bold.)
1. I'm writing in response to your
advertisement for lifeguard, which I saw advertised on http://www.idealist.org/view/job/hFDkMpw9C3H4/.
2. I consider myself a responsable, tidy, methodical and
hard-working person, accustomed to work on rotating turns, driving some
different trucks (I have all of types of truck driver licenses), and I believe
I will be a valuable asset to your great team in Kent
3. I am writing you to apply for the
position of Cirque du Soleil Performer which I saw advertised on your website. As you can see from my
attached CV, I have been working as a String Gymnast during 5 years in a
Fantasy Circus. I have my own performance with fire
4. As you can see from my attached CV,
I have a lot experience in graphic
design in different enterprises and as a freelance I have all the latest
versions of PowerPoint and other specific design programmes in my
MacProBook.
5. I consider myself a dynamic and
responsible person with initiative and organizational skills. I think these
skills might fit in the position that you are offering. I appreciate your
attention and I hope to be a valuable contribution to your company.
6. As you can see from my attached CV,
my qualifications include a degree in Multimedia Studies from UOC (Universitat
Oberta de Catalunya) and some specialized courses of the most important design
programs such as Photoshop, InDesign, Illustrator and Flash.
7. I think I am a good candidate for
this job because I am a hard worker, I love my job, I investigate and improve
the current education through new techniques; I try to learn a lot of things
every day... I hope you will consider me for this job. I look forward to your
reply.
ERROR CORRECTION EXERCISE
And now we have reached your second error
correction exercise! The routine is the same: have a good look at the nine
sentences below and try to correct them. I have marked the mistakes in red.
Write the corrected sentence below and also try to give a short explanation about
why the original sentence was incorrect. Send me your corrections to the
Exercises forum.
1. In addition, as you can see from my
attached CV, I have been working as pastry chef,
and I have worked in different restaurants in Spain and foreign countries,
where I prepared desserts.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
2. I am interested in you advertisement.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
3. I have worked at several beauty saloons since I was 22 years old.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
4. I have large
experience how lifeguard in differents swimingpools and some experience how beach lifeguard.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
5. With reference to your advertisement
published on Tuesday May 6 in the Forum, I am writting
to apply for the position of Reack Truck Driver.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
6. I hope you consider me for this
freelance job. If you need some references of my lasts
jobs I'll keep in touch with these companies.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
7. Dear Sir, // I saw her job offer as a
teacher through the internet and I found
very interesting.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
8. I have experience in all
levels of education; I
worked in kindergarten and private school as a
teacher. I think they are a
good candidate for this job.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
9. I'm a
authentic beer fan, I have knowledges of the
elaboration process of different beers and ingredients.
CORRECTION:
REASON:
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